Need your ears ! Original Song Development "The Counter"

[DianeD]

So this is my first post on the community forum and I don’t know much about music. 🙂

1. Love it as is; and

2. One alternative: Maybe pull a little bit of the harmonica out of the first verse. It covers up some of the vocals — and it feels like I’m just getting to know your voice in the first verse. In the second verse it seems like you use the harmonica as more of a highlighter, and that works great.

Thanks for posting it. Sounds terrific.

[TMutter]

Diane- well i am honored to get your first post as fees back from you. Great input – thanks!

[Bill_Brown]

Hi @TMutter , the arrangement sounds nice as is, but leaning toward @DianeD ‘s alternative. In fact, I wonder how the arrangement would sound if the harmonica was used only during the chorus, and perhaps the ending as well🤔? I would definitely keep some harmonica in it.

[TMutter]

Bill – thanks – I am going to give this a try.

Thanks

[Moonhare]

The basic track is solid – absolutely no problems there – but bringing in a feature instrument like the harmonica does elevate it and bring a texture an tone that creates a really beautiful lonesome atmosphere. @DianeD has a good point about the arrangement. I’m not so bothered by it in the first verse but from a purely songwriting point I would always leave something in the tank for later and saving this to bring added texture later on would do just that. Great work! Really enjoyed this. 🤘😎🎸 – Darren [Moonhare]

[TMutter]

great point about leaving something in the tank to build some energy for the ending in what is a very slow tempo laid back song.

Thanks for taking the time to listen and provide input!

T

[BethL]

They are spot on!!! Well done! So polished. LOve the timbre of your voice. Well thought out songwriting. Love a good story. Bravo!

[TMutter]

Thanks for listening and your kind words!

T

[Marquita]

Great storyline. I agree, buildup tension before introducing the harmonica, (although I loved that you added it). It sounds great on the chorus. You are a good songwriter, musician and humble human. That’s all there is to it. Great that you shared this.

[TMutter]

Thank you for the very kind words. I have played with a new production version that adds in instrumentation over the course of the song and I think it is better. I look forward to sharing the final version.

I think at one point your were going to play one of my originals “Fabric Of You” at a memorial service. Did that happen ? I did release that song on my EP and it has a cello incorporated which I think is a nice add. You can listen to it on:

https://terrymutter.bandcamp.com/releases

Terry

[Guerra6007]

Sounds very good, Terry! Maybe Diane D is onto something. I like the harmonica!

Keep it going!

[TMutter]

Thanks – I think you are right!

[Tom000-18]

TMutter, I like this tune as is! Like how the vocals, harmonica and guitar work complement each other. Thank you for sharing!

[TMutter]

Thanks – I appreciate you having a listen!

[MamaGotBabyT]

I’m Diane, too! I like the guitar accompanying the vocal. I love harmonica but maybe as a bridge? That way loud and clear, its mournfully by itself! Reminiscent of “The Gambler”. Ballads speak volumes in a few minutes!

[TMutter]

Thanks for listening and the input !